Party on Oasis

Hey guys. A few weeks ago I started writing a parody of Mac Miller's Party on 5th ave, that was oasis related. I currently only have bits and pieces so I need you guys to give me some ideas. Here's what I got:

Hey, been around minecraft and back, yeah I did that
Still make maps, and servers and crap
But oasis I joined that
Met these people named ariley and sainteven
Along with invert dixi broad taccy mefabe n'
Tons of other players are what make up oasis.
You play it once and you'll play it all day since
It's the best server out ther
Thought I told you man
If you playin currently see ya raise your hand.

(chorus)
There's a party on oasis
-party on oasis-
That's where everybody's gone
-everybody's gone-
I can sense there be like
Twenty to a hunderd thousand creepers
Aimed right here at the spawn
-right here at the spawn-
Make sure you got a:
Iron vest
Iron pants
Iron shoes.
Gold hat
And any sword you choose.
Cause there's a party on oasis tonight
And that's what were try'n to do.

Tell me what you think of it so far.

Thats great zack, now post this on your utube channel.

mickdude2 wrote:Thats great zack, now post this on your utube channel.

Dude, it clearly states that it isn't done yet.

Well finish it! (<duh)

and, its good. be satisfied with what you got.

mickdude2 wrote:Well finish it! (<duh)

and, its good. be satisfied with what you got.

Mick, I've only been at it for a week. It's gonna take at least a month to finish. Writing a song is harder than it sounds.

It's good. Be satisfied with what you got. Said that last post.

If you're never satisfied, you're never happy. When you're never happy, you blow you're money on useless things. Then you get plastic surgery to make yourself look good, bbut you actually look horrible. Eventually you go down in a tumultous emotional tail-spin. You get into drugs and alcohal and you're life becomes shit. Eventually you come to the conclusion you're life is not worth living and you kill yourself. Don't kill yourself zack. Be satisfied.



This is also what happened after james broke up with nicki. Now, nicki has a nice view in the graveyard.

mickdude2 wrote:It's good. Be satisfied with what you got. Said that last post.

If you're never satisfied, you're never happy. When you're never happy, you blow you're money on useless things. Then you get plastic surgery to make yourself look good, bbut you actually look horrible. Eventually you go down in a tumultous emotional tail-spin. You get into drugs and alcohal and you're life becomes shit. Eventually you come to the conclusion you're life is not worth living and you kill yourself. Don't kill yourself zack. Be satisfied.



This is also what happened after james broke up with nicki. Now, nicki has a nice view in the graveyard.

Mick, you scare me sometimes. Also, who the hell is Nicki?

Do you remember that girl james went out with for two weeks and we never heard from again? yeah.

Getting back on topic, tell me what you guys think and how I can improve.

mention the 1.8 spawn and all the towns and...now i'm repeating what i said to andesconin.